IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organisation To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cultures #work #organisation
Nowadays, there are a lot of ways to learn other cultures, but is working for
a multinational companies
Correct the article-noun agreement
multinational companies
a multinational company
show examples
 actually the best to understand them? To my mind, there are some methods to get to know better
people
 from different countries for many reasons which will be discussed in
this
 essay. On the one hand, working with
people
 of different nationalities can help to understand them better. It is really good for your self-development.
For example
, my dad has been working in
m
Add an article
a
the
show examples
ultinational organisation for 5 years. He met new
people
 from different parts of the world and as result learned two foreign languages. He understood their culture through their behaviour in company, communication skills and so on.
On the other hand
, the most simple way to get to know other civilization is to travel. By travelling, you can learn a lot of new information, about how
that
Remove the determiner
apply
show examples
people
 behave or communicate.
Moreover
, you can try to live or to study in
f
Add an article
a
show examples
oreign country. By doing so, you can be more aware of their mentality.
For instance
, even though you do not know any language that can help you socialize or something about tradition, you can still get to know their culture better when will be surrounded by them.In result, they will become more competent
on
Verify preposition usage
in
show examples
 other languages, cultures ad traditions. In conclusion, personally
Add a comma
,
show examples
I believe that there are many various methods to understand humans of
another nationalities
Replace the adjective
another nationality
other nationalities
show examples
 and I completely disagree with that statement that working in international
oraganisation
Correct your spelling
organisation
 is the best way to know
people
.
Submitted by Anastasia Masliana on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: