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Some people say young people should be completely free to choose their future job but others think young people must be more realistic in their choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many are of the view that young people should prioritise pragmatic
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 choices over their passions. In my opinion, youth is an opportunity to follow pursuits with a low probability of success. Many
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 are heavily invested in the idea of security.
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 is often the case if they had a difficult upbringing or were born into times of national upheaval.
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, many
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 in Vietnam who grew up immediately after the American War, are still scarred by their experiences of deprivation.
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, it is a common refrain in Vietnam these days for young people to complain about how much control their
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 have over their choice of a major or
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. Most students
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 work in safe, tedious fields like finance, banking, advertising, and law. They have job security and a basic floor on their earning potential in the event of an economic downturn.
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, failing at a particular
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 path early in life does not foreclose future success. Most can major in a subject they love, work for several years in that field and the likely results will either be some degree of success or modest failure. If they fail, it is possible to move on in one’s twenties to study or work towards a safer, more lucrative position.
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 justified by the rare instances of tremendous achievement including famous actors, directors, singers, and other artists.
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, choosing a
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 freely can be vindicated by the combination of potential fame, less transcendent but still respectable jobs, and the ability to transition to a new
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 before middle age. In conclusion, the allure of security does not outweigh the myriad advantages of freely choosing a
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 one.
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 and students should both heed
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 advice or risk regretting the missed opportunity.

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