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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or storage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It has long been a subject of discussion whether we should accept bad circumstances in our
lives
 or we should try to improve that situation. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the debate and explain why I feel that latter out the former. Primarily, by accepting bad
situations
 as fate, no one achieves anything in their
lives
.
People
 who struggle in their
lives
 by any means will feel depressed and it might be difficult for them to overcome those
situations
. They accept those circumstances as fate and show less interest in making
situations
 better and
this
 kind of behaviour makes
situations
 hopeless. Examples of
this
 scenario can be seen in many cases where
people
 make their
lives
 miserable with any intentions to change their
lives
. Admittedly, it is true that accepting reality is always good, but one can not dismiss the benefits of hard work to reality.
Besides
, one should understand that nothing impossible with hard work and dedication. If anyone struggling with any factor in their
lives
, they should start working hard to change things. Not can hard work improve the
situations
, but can
also
 bring happiness and respect. a lot of
people
 in our society struggle hard in their
lives
, but with their dedication, they can suppress them. Examples of
this
 can be seen in every successful
people
's life, who struggled in their
lives
 and achieved a lot. In conclusion, I feel that by working hard with dedication, anyone can overcome bad
situations
 and can enjoy their
lives
.
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