Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than when they are punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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ew years back, which says physically punishing children is a criminal offence, people are putting forward their best argument for and against it. We can
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that students
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well in their
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when they are confident about themselves, which in turn comes from rewarding and not from punishing them. While we can say that rewarding a
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is necessary, but
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them. Rewarding does not have to be a gift or a material; it can be a verbal appreciation. When a
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is rewarded for their achievement, he\she feel a boost of confidence in themselves.
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little gesture makes them feel good about themselves. Handling studies and real-
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problems can be depressing for a
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is a responsibility of every adult related to the
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to boost their morale
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and make them feel connected and less anxious. When a
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confidence and support from others for his\her work, he\she becomes more determined and more dedicated to their work, which are important ingredients of success recipe.
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, too much relaxation and too much appreciation can make them
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about their work and build their ego, which in turn is not good for anybody.
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should learn and understand the importance of discipline in his
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, if we reward students all the time, they will not understand the meaning of failure or loss in their
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, to make them disciplined in
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, sometimes we need to punish them as well.
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is turn will encourage them to do better
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time to not be punished. In conclusion, I would like to say that, while it
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necessary to reward and encourage a
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etterment of his
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, punishment is
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required in between to make them disciplined and not turn them overconfident,
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, disrupt them from achieving success in
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. We adult, who are connected to them, need to perform
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crucial responsibility to understand when they need to be rewarded and when they need to be punished.
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