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after leaving school or university, young people should choose a job or career that they love, rather than one that pays the best salary. to what extent do you agree with this statement?

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There is no doubt that choosing a job after finishing university is one of the most important parts of our
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. While some
people
 believe that we have to find something we really
love
, others argue that we should look for the best payslip. In
this
 essay, I will support with examples why I tend to agree with both of them up to a point.
Firstly
, it is clear that the path you decide to follow will be the one you are going to be involved for the rest of your
life
. So, the most sensible decision would be to choose something you
love
 rather than something you do not want to work in.
For example
, if you do not like to be in an office environment because you
love
 attending
people
, you should choose a job related with
people
. As a consequence, you would live with less stress and more passion, because you are working in the place you really want to be.
On the other hand
, there is a clear relationship between
the
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salary and
the
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life
 quality.
Moreover
, if you want to have a great
life
, you need to earn a lot of money in order to pay
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everything you would like to have or do.
For instance
,
this
 situation increases when you have a family and you should fill all the basics needs.
As a result
, you should have a great job with a great salary to provide everything your family could need and deserve. To conclude, while I accept some
people
 would choose passion over salary, or vice versa. I believe they are equally important because doing what you
love
 is related
with
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happiness, but we should take into account that having high incomes can give you the
life
 you really deserve.
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