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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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There is no doubt that the future of the planet depends on the actions we are taking now. While some people believe that in order to face front some issues related to
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nvironment we should have a global response, others argue that each nation should act
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 their own. In
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Firstly
,
this
 is a global problem which affects every part of the planet,
consequently
, it should be solved by all countries at the same time and with the same effort.
Moreover
, if one country applies any measure to improve some environmental concerns,
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climate change or pollution, but other countries do not implement any measures, nothing will change.
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, to avoid that type of attitude there are organizations that control countries in order to maintain the order.
On the other hand
, it is clear that each nation has its own concerns and problems.
Furthermore
, we need to adapt the solution to the country and the way its citizens live,
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 instance, we can not compare China's pollution problem to Europe's pollution problem because they are two different nations that have to solve
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 in their own manner.
As a result
, if they are not able to solve intern problems, they will not be able
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 a global scale. To conclude, looking at both sides of the debate I firmly believe that despite
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 is a global issue that we have to solve as one planet, each nation has to
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 the measures to their own concerns.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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