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‘Failure is proof that the desire wasn’t strong enough’ To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Failure
 is a natural part of
life
. Without
failure
,we cannot define success. Almost every successful person has been subject to
failures
 and disappointments in
life
.
However
,
failure
 affects different
people
 in different ways and we cannot generalize on how
people
 will deal with various
failures
. Some
people
 crumble under the pressures of
life
 and their
failure
 affects them for the rest of their natural lives. Others,
however
, use
failures
 to learn from their mistakes and improve the quality of their lives. The argument that
failure
 is proof that the desire was not strong enough is a highly controversial argument. How can we judge if we did not go through the experiences of the
people
 we are judging?. Luck and fortune play a big role in the successes and
failures
 of different
people
. Some
people
 are born rich, healthy, mentally privileged, while others may be born with a deficiency that can challenge them since the day they were born. Personally, I have met with
people
 from different walks of
life
 who led extremely difficult lives during their childhood or adolescent years, but with their sheer determination and dedication, they were able to overcome the insurmountable challenges they faced. At the same time,I have met with
people
 who were psychologically traumatized and were unable to come out of their depression zone following a
failure
 they faced. To conclude, there is no definite answer to
this
 question, but there is an analysis based on a case by case basis. Some
people
 can be born without privileges and through their hard work and dedication can achieve what others who were born more privileged couldn't. It really comes down to their own resilience, willpower, and outlook on
life
.
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