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It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that life long sentences is a better deterrent. Discuss both views.

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Nowadays,
people
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 are divided on the basis of criminal
punishment
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. Many
people
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 believe that
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 is good deterrent while
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 others think that lifetime sentencing is
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 better. I,
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, discuss both the views in
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,
punishment
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 should vary as per age, gender and circumstances under which
crime
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 committed.
punishment
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 should be as possible as strict so,
people
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 can think
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housand times before doing it.
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, due to wrong decisions, many
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 suffer badly. The
death
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penalty
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 is not
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deal
punishment
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 for the criminal. But, for heinous
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such
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 as murder and rape
death
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penalty
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 should be given. on the other side, for a petty
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, many government institutes are there for rehabilitation.
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, to run the rehabilitation and jail for prisoners is costly in terms of food, safety, etc. It is hard to manage all those things for the government.
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, Kasab the terrorist, who was condemned as he was charged with the notorious terrorist attack on
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 in Mumbai. For, their security and safety authorities spend14 crore as per IDC news. Post decision and judicial killing is leading to
lessens
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 the Expenses. There are
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 who are
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erennial nuisance to the society punishments , say
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 serial killers, rapists and terrorists For them, the
death
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penalty
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 is a good deterrent. In conclusion, there are advantages and disadvantages
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 the
death
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penalty
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 and long sentences. It totally depends on the mode of
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 and it is
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 an alarming condition for the government to reduce the
crime
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 rate.
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