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1. Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that studying a
university
 degree is a goal that a lot of
students
 want to achieve. While some
people
 believe that rich
students
 have more facilities to enter in
this
 institution, others argue that they have the same difficulties as poor
people
. In
this
 essay, I will support with examples why I tend to agree with the former argument.
Firstly
,
people
 that have enough money to pay for private schools can achieve better scores during the school period because
this
 type of education is better than the public one.
Furthermore
, they can afford private teachers who can aid their children not only with the lessons but
also
 with other issues related to exams like stress.
For example
, in Spain
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the percentage of
students
 that have enough punctuation to enter any
university
 come from private schools. If we only had public education, we would not have these sort of differences.
Secondly
, studying a degree in any
university
 is expensive and not everybody can afford its price.
Moreover
, there are different types of universities and rich
students
 can choose where to go depending on the price.
For instance
, if they have enough punctuation to go to the public one they will study there
,
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 because it is cheaper.
By contrast
, if they do not achieve the needed score, they can pay for any private
university
. Clearly, some
students
 do not have
such
 opportunity,
consequently
, they could not access
this
 type of high education. To conclude,
although
 I accept that some
people
 think that both
students
 have difficulties entering in the
university
, I firmly believe that the more money you have, the fewer problems you are going to face front to enter in
this
 type of institution.
In other words
, if you can pay for an alternative, you can deal with any issue
such
 as not having enough score or
university
 prices.
Submitted by cristina.arino on

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