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Some people think new homes need to be built with private outdoor space such as a garden, yard, or balcony. Do you think this is more advantageous or more disadvantageous?

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A beautiful house with all the essential amenities is everybody's dream. Some
people
 believe that new homes should be built with balconies or private gardens. In my opinion,
this
 has more advantages than disadvantages which I will explain in
this
 essay. There are many
people
 who believe that having a private garden or balcony requires high maintenance, especially if you are planting fresh produce in
such
 places. Those who plant fruits and vegetables in their private garden need to invest a good amount
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time and money to ensure
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roper growth of their plants.
Moreover
, clearing the fallen leaves from trees and pruning bushes are
also
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 tasks.
In addition
,
people
 think that storms can have
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egative impact on these outdoor spaces at times. Trees may be uprooted or can lose branches during storms as well as there is a risk of flooding in the
backyard
 if drainage isn't properly maintained.
However
, I feel the
adavntages
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advantages
 outweigh these disadvantages.
A private
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 outdoor space can be used as children's play area as kids always love to play and it may not be possible to send them to the playground all the time. Having a fenced
backyard
 can enable children to play in a safe and secure environment.
Also
, it helps provide a buffer between you and your neighbours. Most
home owners
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 do not prefer hearing loud noises from their neighbour's house throughout the day which is solved by having a
backyard
 or lawn. In conclusion, many
people
 prefer new homes with a private
backyard
 or balcony.
Although
, owning
such
 houses may cost a
firtune
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fortune
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in my opinion
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, in my opinion,
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 it is worth the experience.
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