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«Prevention is better than cure” Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extend do you agree?

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Nowadays the quantity of people, who are suffering from critical diseases, is increasing day by day. In my view, we ought to start taking care of our well-being more responsible to avoid unanticipated drawbacks,
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, in some cases adoption of corrective measures can have inevitable and irreversible implications.
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, in many countries, the public medicine consultation is high-priced but ineffective to say nothing of private establishments. Thanks to our state-of-the-art progress in ubiquitous technological areas amount all kinds of illnesses can be founded in the early stages.
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, as sooner individuals are alerted for their health issues, as less money they will spend on the treatment. It would be unfair not to mention the fact that one of much scientific research proved that most of
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uman beings, who have prevented sickness, have spared a huge number of money on a cure.
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, these days men are dying from various types of disabling conditions due to the absence of certain education and preventive actions. Sometimes precautionary steps can save a person’s life.
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, cancer is generally considered to comprise more than 100 different diseases and can result in serious consequences. The solution to
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avoiding difficulties is starting to do chemical procedures. Unfortunately, even these operations may not help, but it will definitely enhance the chance of healing. In conclusion, I would like to say that permanent checking health condition is a far greater idea than establishing more hospitals to treat already ill people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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