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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Folks consider that there should be affixed verdict against the illegal works.
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, after giving a motivational speech to take commit from criminal not to crime again should be implemented if that evil person amends himself. From my perspective, there must create an opportunity for bad
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 to change themselves not to do any wrong
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 with, every person is bound to give answers to his works. If a man is not in bindings he would be in wrong track and as a consequence, he will assign himself in many evil
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, punishment should be applied to spot them the negative effects of wrong
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. If the legal action is implied on the dangerous
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 who are being habituated, it would be a great warning for them.
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, by applying death sentences it would be possible to degrade criminal activities in societies.
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, if a criminal does not get chances to retract themselves they would be very furious for mankind. After coming from a prison cell,
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 do not take them normally and it will create a lot of blur for the criminals.
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ack of getting chance be a good man, a criminal is becoming an evil person passing the days.
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, if a criminal gets rehabilitation to settle themselves it would be benefited for all kinds of
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 who create a fair in their mind of the evil persons. In conclusion, laws must be enforced against bad
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, criminals
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 get chances to settle a good man doing appropriate
deeds
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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