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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Recently, there has been widespread controversy about the issue of sharing of vital knowledge to the public. These are two contrasting viewpoints, some scholars claim that it is beneficial to publicize cogent
information
 about some range
such
 as
science
 , economy and academic level while others opin that some facts should be limited for publicizing.
This
 essay will discuss both viewpoints and a final opinion will be drawn. To start with, supporters of
this
 point claim that disseminating facts about
science
 , business talk or academic field is paramount because it enhances people preparedness.
This
 implies that
,
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 precautions are taken easily if there is exposure to negative effect and it prevents severe victims.
Likewise
, in the area of business, investors make a decision to invest more or reduce their contribution if proper
information
 is given to them.
In addition
 to
this
 point, proper sharing of
information
 help to enhance the scope of knowledge within the field of
science
 and
research
 work.
This
 means that researchers will be able to know their limit and search more for improvement. To cite an example, in the area of cancer control, Scientist in Nigeria are engaging more in a
research
 study on how to suppress the incidents within the society.
Hence
, I believe that proper
information
 exchange is vital to the progress of the world at large.
In contrast
, opponents of
this
 view allude that facts or data should be concealed especially in some specific area
such
 as
research
 and
science
also
 at the academic level because it can create fear and competition within the society.
In other words
, military
information
 and technology can pose threat within the public and they must be classified.
In addition
, they can be an increase in crime rates
such
 as hacking online servers and personal accounts.
For instance
, the Economic and Financial Crime Commission in Nigeria revealed the hike in
cyber crime
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 rate in the country.
Therefore
,
this
 can be demonstrated that publicizing vital
information
 about some field can be dangerous. In conclusion,
this
 essay discussed the importance of broadcasting of some scientific or
research
information
 within the society, some claimed
that is
 it beneficial while others disapproved the motive. To my perspective, I opined that disseminating of
information
 enhanced knowledge and contribute to the rate of preparedness.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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