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It has been said that reading for pleasure is better in developing imagination and language skills than watching TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#pleasure #imagination #language #skills #tv
Some people believe that reading is more beneficial than watching the television for enhancing imaginative and linguistic skills. I agree with
this
 assertion to a large extent and reasons to strengthen my viewpoint are put forth in the subsequent paragraphs. On the one hand, spending time in front of the television can improve speaking
skill
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 which is imperative for learning a new
language
. It is primarily
due to
 the fact that
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pronunciation, which is essential for speaking, can be effectively learnt through listening to the native speaker of the
language
.
This
 aspect is offered by television which provides innumerable programmes and films
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 different languages.
For example
, in 2016, schools in Japan introduced TV rooms in order to make primary school children familiar with foreign languages, thereby assisting individuals to learn a
language
 in an effective
way
.
On the other hand
, books are not only considered
as
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an impeccable method to learn a
language
, but
also
 it is the only
way
 to improve imagination. First of all, the different
aspect
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 of languages
such
 as grammar and vocabulary can be analysed in a proper manner through written content. Since
learner
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 can easily grasp the grammar by spending more time on the reading part, it has proven to be a more efficient
way
. Not only
this
, a case in point is that more vocabulary is often used
while
 writing a particular script than speaking,
thus
, reading is the best
way
 to learn new words
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 the
language
.
Furthermore
, imagination power can be increased by thinking about different characters in a novel which is not possible in
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 of watching TV as pictures present a clear view of the theme and characters. Not only
this
,
while
 reading poems and phrases, every reader
interpret
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 the different meaning of the author's viewpoint.
Therefore
, brainstorming on reading poems and novels aids the readers in widening their imagination.
To conclude
, even though watching TV improves speaking skills, I still believe reading is not only more conducive for the learner in terms of mastering other aspects of a
language
such
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vocabulary and grammar, but
also
 raising their imaginative power.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imagination
  • language skills
  • active engagement
  • creativity
  • vocabulary
  • language usage
  • passive
  • simplified
  • dialogue
  • depth
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