Some people believe that it is essential to include physical education classes in the curriculum for all school age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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assume that it is necessary to add the syllabus of physical education in all educational institute,
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others think to be more focus on university subjects which is
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better
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physical education. In my opinion, physical education should
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in all
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, it is important to add one more module with other regular subjects. So, that it will be more interesting for
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oungster. As it will help them to know about physical
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ew schedule it will be commodious and retain the temptation.
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