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Immigration has a major impact on society What are the main reason for immigration To what consequences can it lead

Throughout the world, the
immigration
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 process impacts not only the society but
also
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 the culture of a
country
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.
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,
this
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 essay will discuss the possible main reason for that
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phenomenon
, and
also
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 its consequences.
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 with, it is important to point out that the majority of
people
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 living in the world can not access a good standard of living in their native countries.
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, it is inherent to human life the necessity of improving and creating a better environment to raise a family. To illustrate that, the United Nations - UN - has published a study which declares that
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 per cent of
people
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 who decide to start a new life in other countries were looking for the possibility of living in a
country
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 where more study and future labour opportunities could be offered to their children. It is
also
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 known that
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immigration
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phenomenum
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phenomenon
 alters the structure of a
country
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.
People
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 who decide to live abroad, carry with them their history, habits and preferences
reagarding
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regarding
 politics and religion. Considering a major scale, that could lead a
country
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 to lose its identity and
sufer
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suffer
 with the abundance of diversity.
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, Canada is a
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 which
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 the process of
immigration
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 and, nowadays, more than half of habitants who live in Toronto are foreigners.
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,
immigration
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 can affect negatively the educational and
health
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 system of a
country
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, since it might increase the demand for those services. In 2019, Germany received a numerous amount of
people
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 running from civil war, in Siria.
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, the
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 government had a few issues to maintain their
health
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 system working properly due to the increase
of
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people
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 looking for
health
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 treatment. To summarize, most
people
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 decide to leave their countries in order to live in a better place, where might offer them the possibility of raising their families with more opportunities in life.
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, some consequences can be connected with
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i
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the
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mmigration
process
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,
such
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 as the risk of
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losing
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 the identity of a
country
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 and problems related to increasing of demand in basic services
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 as
health
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 or education.

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