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Immigration has a major impact on society What are the main reason for immigration To what consequences can it lead

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Throughout the world, the
immigration
 process impacts not only the society but
also
 the culture of a
country
.
Therefore
,
this
 essay will discuss the possible main reason for that
phenomenum
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phenomenon
, and
also
 its consequences.
To begin
 with, it is important to point out that the majority of
people
 living in the world can not access a good standard of living in their native countries.
Furthermore
, it is inherent to human life the necessity of improving and creating a better environment to raise a family. To illustrate that, the United Nations - UN - has published a study which declares that
sixty five
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 per cent of
people
 who decide to start a new life in other countries were looking for the possibility of living in a
country
 where more study and future labour opportunities could be offered to their children. It is
also
 known that
the
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immigration
phenomenum
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phenomenon
 alters the structure of a
country
.
People
 who decide to live abroad, carry with them their history, habits and preferences
reagarding
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regarding
 politics and religion. Considering a major scale, that could lead a
country
 to lose its identity and
sufer
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suffer
 with the abundance of diversity.
For instance
, Canada is a
country
 which
stimulate
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 the process of
immigration
 and, nowadays, more than half of habitants who live in Toronto are foreigners.
Furthermore
,
immigration
 can affect negatively the educational and
health
 system of a
country
, since it might increase the demand for those services. In 2019, Germany received a numerous amount of
people
 running from civil war, in Siria.
Consequently
, the
german
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 government had a few issues to maintain their
health
 system working properly due to the increase
of
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people
 looking for
health
 treatment. To summarize, most
people
 decide to leave their countries in order to live in a better place, where might offer them the possibility of raising their families with more opportunities in life.
Nevertheless
, some consequences can be connected with
i
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mmigration
process
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,
such
 as the risk of
lose
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losing
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 the identity of a
country
 and problems related to increasing of demand in basic services
such
 as
health
 or education.
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