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Some people believe that the higher a product is priced, the more likely it is that people will want to buy it. To what extent does price influence potential buyers? What other factors influence people to buy a ptoduct?

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It is argued that
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price
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 makes the
product
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 more attractive for the costumers. I am entirely sure that the high number on the
price
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 tag enhances noticeably the eagerness of the consumer to purchase the item. Another factor encouraging people to buy the
product
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 may comprise a big discount.
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 glance, the
price
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 unconsciously gives the consumers information about the quality of the
product
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 and the image of the company.
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, the higher is the value, the more reputable and popular is the brand, and
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, the item is
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 to be more desirable.
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, in one of the jewellery shops
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some cheap earings were not being sold.
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, the manager tripled their
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 and within two days the majority of the earings found their owners.
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, another strong marketing tool
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discounts. The opportunity to acquire a valuable
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 with its
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price
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 leads the individuals to buy more and more clothes or gadgets regardless of their necessity. All business companies are aware of
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 psychological aspect and successfully use it to make more profits.
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, more than 40% of
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nnual income of the company “Adidas” comprises the purchases realised during the seasonal discounts. In conclusion,
marketologists
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bracketologists
 possess numerous methods to impact positively the decision of the consumer. One of them is the high
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 of the
product
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, and the
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 is the attractive discounts.

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