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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Issues related to transportation are discussed these days. It is argued that due to the limits of
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 budgets, some people think that both road and motorways should be invested rather than public transportation. I firmly disagree with
this
 assertion. The explanation will be shown in
this
 essay. The principal reason to consider is that public
transport
 is a powerful tool for coping with urban problems;
such
 as
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air pollution and overpopulation. Since
,
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 nowadays many countries are facing
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oor quality of air owing to vehicle exhaust gas.
Hence
, governments should enhance mass
transport
;
such
 as
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, in order to encourage people
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 the city to use it
instead
 of using private cars.
For instance
, over recent years, due to inefficient buses in Bangkok, most people opt to work by their cars
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as a result
 they
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 been facing unhealthy smog, since Another point is that thanks to the capacity of public transports;
such
 as train, mass transports provide more several benefits than
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rivate vehicle in terms of travelling, logistics service and economic progress.
In other words
, public
transport
 has a positive impact on the development of a nation. A good case in
this
 point is that extending the route for accessing in some rural areas can distribute various opportunities from urban to suburban areas;
such
 as new jobs and new technologies. All thing considered, I am of the opinion that spending budget on the improvement of
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ublic
transport
 system plays a vital role in the development of a nation.
Therefore
 governments should carefully consider
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 which is most suitable for their countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Transportation
  • Congestion
  • Economy
  • Carbon emissions
  • Pollution
  • Social inclusion
  • Urban development
  • Efficient
  • Investment
  • Reliance
  • Boosting
  • Affordable
  • Private vehicle users
  • Public transport system
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