In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they like. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

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It is argued that the children have to follow strict
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of behaviour whereas they are liberated to perform
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they want in different countries.I reckon,they should have to move on their own will.
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and foremost,juveniles can learn in a creative way after making them free.
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the curiosity of child will increase if they are let
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freely
as they get information about
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myriads
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of things wherever they go.Result of
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will indirectly let towards new discoveries and inventions.
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,most of the scientists who invented various machines and
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describe themselves passed autonomous life during their childhood.
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,the nurture of the present indirectly
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to the future result.
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,letting children on activities they prefer to do and without
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help them to be more satisfied.They will follow their passions as doing
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makes them fully satisfied
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even though
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,it leads towards
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etter nature of
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hild.Young
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of
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ealthy family tends to be unhappy due to the strict
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to be followed in their family while the happiest and
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joyful
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children
are of those parents who behave in a friendly manner with their offsprings. In conclusion,children
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up in a liberate environments tends to be more creative and they
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to be the happiest rather than those who have to obey strict
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given to them by their guardians and society.
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