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Many people believe that film is a less important art than other forms such as literature and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Movies
 are considered less significant as compared to
other type
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another type
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 of
arts
 like literature and painting. I totally condemn the idea of giving less
imporatance
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importance
 to films. In
further
, I will explain the cause of disagreement with the above statement and why
movies
 should be given more importance. I firmly believe that there are many skills that are involved in making films,
however
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 still there are some people that consider it of less
imporatnce
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importance
. Writing a good script is an
art
 that contributes
in
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to
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 making of a
movie
,
furthermore
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 there are many artist that put their role in filmmaking. These all contributions of
arts
 and artists result in a superhit
movie
 that we enjoy watching in the cinemas.
For example
, in many
hollywood
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movies
now-a-days
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nowadays
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 there are
art
animationist
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animations
animation
 that
potrate
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potato
 the whole scenes of
movies
 in a beautiful manner that they made the unreal and
immaginative
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imaginative
imagination
 into a real image. These
artist
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 are visual painters that
brings
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 imaginations into moving virtual images.
Movies
 give better
entertaintment
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entertainment
 in less time as compared to literature, painting and other
arts
.
Also
, they are a good source of time passing, that can be watched anywhere and at any time. There are many institutes and universities that provide degrees in filmmaking.
For example
,
first
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 filmmaking institute started in 1919 in Moscow, after which it became
as
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a significant
art
 that has been taught worldwide.
This
 brings me to my point that with changing demands and
intrests
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interests
 of people. films and
movies
 are getting more
imporatance
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importance
important
. All in all,
film
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the film
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 was considered as of less importance as compared to other
arts
 like literature and painting by many people.
However
, I totally condemn
this
 idea, as
i
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 consider
movie
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the movie
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 as of more
imporatance
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importance
 in
now-a-days
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nowadays
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 than any other form of
art
, because
movie
it self
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itself
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 is
combination
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a combination
the combination
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 of
many
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any
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type
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types
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 of
arts
 i.e.
liturature
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literature
, songs, acting, animation and much more.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aesthetic
  • artistic expression
  • cultural significance
  • historical context
  • impactful
  • literary works
  • masterpiece
  • medium (e.g., medium of film)
  • narrative techniques
  • painting styles
  • pedagogical
  • perception
  • profound
  • technological advancement
  • visual storytelling
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