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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In some countries, especially the developed ones, more and more
people
 opt to live separately
instead
 of living with their family than in the
last
 few years. From my perspective, the consequences of
this
 trend may outweigh its benefits.
To begin
 with, living by themselves can not only minimize the cost of living included expenses and the total of other bills but
also
 rise the saving money. Many researchers proved that
people
 living isolated know how to manage their lives better.
Moreover
, some unnecessary conflicts because of different hobbies and view of life can be avoided when not living under one roof. For a relevant example, according to The Housing Council, nearly over 65% of
people
 choose a single housing as it is easier for them to effort the standard of living.
However
,
on the other hand
, most
people
 cannot deny the
cozy
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 feeling that family or neighbour are around to share their stress and sad stories and give them a hug as
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encouragement. Living alone,
therefore
, brings us more risks to face up with depression because we hardly interact with other
people
. What is more, if we felt sick or passed out suddenly, it would be too dangerous to stay home with no one like
this
. The Times reported that a large number of citizens said that they were so tired of doing everything alone or self-isolation felt a lot like jail. To conclude,
although
 the trend of living alone is rising day after day, it still
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 more harm for us than advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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