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Some people believe that nowadays we have too much choice. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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İt is generally thought that
people
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 can seek the benefit from myriad
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 in today's complex society. Personally, I agree with
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 point of view for several reasons. There is no doubt true that there are countless
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 we face in a technologically developed and globalized world. Looking at the bright side, having numerous
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 could probably cause
people
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 to choose whatever they want. It is obvious that there are wide ranges of products, services, as well as opportunities that we can make a decision which
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 is suitable for us.
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, when I go to the market or retail objects where
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 me a lot of chances to make a
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, I always deliberate the goods a lot to choose
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one
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.
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, in
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people
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 may have the opportunity to buy anything which can be affordable for their pocket. In a rapidly changing world, human beings have progressively developed every field. It would appear that to make a
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people
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 have to have different kinds of option.
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, I agree that we have more chances than the past to choose something, according to some researchers, the more
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people
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 have, the less happy they will be. It is because
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we do not know which commodity is decent for us among abundant products, and to choose the best
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 we need to search all of them. At the
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 we choose
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 of them
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 and get out of there. But choosing another option may make us feel down,
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 we think that maybe we would pick other product, not
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. As
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can be seen, owning lots of
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choice
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 is not beneficial all the time. To sum up, it is understandable that there are shortage options in some areas,
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 I am inclined to believe that
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 have already achieved to possess lots of
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • decision fatigue
  • myriad
  • dissatisfaction
  • regret
  • paralysis of action
  • empowers
  • preferences
  • innovation
  • competitiveness
  • fosters
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