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Some people believe that by killing someone society is also making a crime, so, that why death penalty should be forbidden. Life in prison would be a better punishment. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays some people consider that
life
 in
prison
 is a better solution than the
death
penalty
. I completely disagree with
this
 statement, since
this
 is the best
punishment
 for murderers.
First
 of all, the primary reason why I think the
death
penalty
 is more suitable because there are some
crimes
 which cannot be fair punishing them with
life
 in
prison
.
For example
, terrorism is the most hazardous crime and
this
 affects lots of people’s
life
. During the terror attacks criminal endanger hundreds of people, in some cases thousands of them. So , lifelong
prison
 is not an appropriate
punishment
 in
this
 situation.
Moreover
, by giving the
death
penalty
 the governments might prevent some
crimes
.
For instance
, in
Azerbaijan
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 since they do not apply the
death
penalty
, the rate of
crimes
 like raping is growing up day by day.
Therefore
,
this
 type of
punishment
 would be a preventive measure to other people who are willing to commit murders, as well as the rate of crime, would be decreased.
Finally
, lifelong detentions provide offenders with free stocks of food,
besides
 sleeping places. The authorities take care of the murderers during their
life
 which they spend in
prison
instead
 of t capital
punishment
. In return of their
crimes
 , they acquire care of the government until the end of their
life
 which does not seem a sufficient
penalty
. In the conclusion, from my point of view ensuring criminals with lifelong
prison
 they are not penalized, culprits of some violation should be given the
death
penalty
.
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