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Some people believe that by killing someone society is also making a crime, so, that why death penalty should be forbidden. Life in prison would be a better punishment. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays some people consider that
life
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 in
prison
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 is a better solution than the
death
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penalty
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. I completely disagree with
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 statement, since
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 is the best
punishment
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 for murderers.
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 of all, the primary reason why I think the
death
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penalty
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 is more suitable because there are some
crimes
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 which cannot be fair punishing them with
life
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 in
prison
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.
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, terrorism is the most hazardous crime and
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 affects lots of people’s
life
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. During the terror attacks criminal endanger hundreds of people, in some cases thousands of them. So , lifelong
prison
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 is not an appropriate
punishment
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 in
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 situation.
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, by giving the
death
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penalty
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 the governments might prevent some
crimes
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.
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 since they do not apply the
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penalty
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, the rate of
crimes
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 like raping is growing up day by day.
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,
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 type of
punishment
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 would be a preventive measure to other people who are willing to commit murders, as well as the rate of crime, would be decreased.
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, lifelong detentions provide offenders with free stocks of food,
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 sleeping places. The authorities take care of the murderers during their
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 which they spend in
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instead
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 of t capital
punishment
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. In return of their
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 , they acquire care of the government until the end of their
life
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 which does not seem a sufficient
penalty
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. In the conclusion, from my point of view ensuring criminals with lifelong
prison
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 they are not penalized, culprits of some violation should be given the
death
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penalty
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.
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