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With the recent development in technology like e-books, some people feel that the printed media like books, newspapers and magazine will soon be a thing of the past. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays,
books
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,
newspapers
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 and magazines are becoming less popular because technology is spreading. In fact, many
people
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 prefer to read e-
books
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.
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, some
people
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 prefer buying e-
books
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 or reading news online because is easier and more accessible.
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, in the past
newspapers
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 were very popular because it was the only way to connect with the world.
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, now we are always connected with smartphones, tablets and televisions and we inform ourselves with those devices. We can just simply open the internet and be informed rather than have to go out and buy a newspaper.
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 to that, many
people
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 prefer technology because it is more sustainable. In fact, trees are cut to make
books
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 or magazines.
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, we tend to prefer technology because it is immediate and
on the contrary
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newspapers
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 are printed once a day.
On the other hand
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, there is still a great number of
people
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 who prefer to read news on paper.
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, elder
people
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 sometimes don'
t
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 have access to mobile devices or don'
t
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 know how to use them and
thus
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, they enjoy
newspapers
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 more.
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 to that,
people
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 who go to work usually prefer to read paper
books
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 or
newspapers
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 since they often take the subway, where the internet connection isn'
t
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 always great. In conclusion, I believe that paper
books
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 are becoming less popular but I don'
t
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 think they will disappear in the near future because many
people
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 still utilize them for many reasons.
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Your opinion

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