Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed films need to seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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of mobile
phones
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or
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tablets
is vital for society. A segment of society belive's that now we can see films on our
phones
or
tablets
there is no need to go to the
cinema
.
However
, others opine that to be fully enjoyed films need to
seen
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in a
cinema
. I would like to delve both the arguments before forming an opinion.
To begin
with, the
first
or foremost watching
movies
on our
phones
or
tablets
is good. There
are
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no need to go to
cinema
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the cinema

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. Go to
cinema
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the cinema

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for watching
movie
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a movie
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can cause wastage of money and
time
. In
cinema
there
are
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a lot of crowd due to
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there
are
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no fun to watch
movie
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a movie
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.
In addition
to
this
watching
movie
on
phone
or
tablets
can save
the
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apply

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time
and money. In
phone
or
tablet
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,tablet

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we only watch
movie
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a movie
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in free
time
.
for example
in covid 19 there
are
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is

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no permission to watch
movie
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a movie
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in
cinema
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the cinema
a cinema

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. Mobile
phone
or
tablet
help
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to watch
movie
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during covid 19.
Thus
, watching
movies
in
phones
or
tablet
is good.
On the other hand
, there
are
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is

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full enjoyment in watching
movie
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a movie
the movie

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in
cinema
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a cinema
the cinema

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rather than
phones
or
tablets
. Individual's pocket doesn't allow to buy a mobile
phone
for watching
movies
so they go to
cinema
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the cinema

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for watching
movie
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a movie
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.
In addition
to
this
In mobile
phone
or
tablet
yongester
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cant watch
movie
with family cos they are not comfortable so they go to
cinema
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the cinema

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to watch
movie
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a movie
the movie

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.
For
example
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individual
dont
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watch adult
movies
in
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home
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so they go to
cinema
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the cinema

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to watch adult
movies
.
Hence
,
cinema
is good for full enjoyment. In
conclusion
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considering all the point mentioned
above watching
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movie
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a movie
the movie

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in free
time
phone
or
tablet
is good but
also
cinema
is good for full enjoyment with family and friends.
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