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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed films need to seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Nevertheless
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use
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 of mobile
phones
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ir
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or
in
tablets
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 is vital for society. A segment of society belive's that now we can see films on our
phones
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 or
tablets
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 there is no need to go to the
cinema
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.
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, others opine that to be fully enjoyed films need to
seen
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 in a
cinema
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. I would like to delve both the arguments before forming an opinion.
To begin
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 with, the
first
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 or foremost watching
movies
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 on our
phones
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 or
tablets
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 is good. There
are
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 no need to go to
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cinema
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the cinema
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. Go to
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cinema
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the cinema
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 for watching
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movie
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a movie
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 can cause wastage of money and
time
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. In
cinema
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 there
are
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 a lot of crowd due to
crowd
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the crowd
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 there
are
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 no fun to watch
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movie
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a movie
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.
In addition
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this
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 watching
movie
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 on
phone
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 or
tablets
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 can save
the
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time
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 and money. In
phone
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 or
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tablet
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 we only watch
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movie
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a movie
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 in free
time
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.
for example
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 in covid 19 there
are
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is
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 no permission to watch
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movie
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a movie
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 in
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cinema
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the cinema
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 . Mobile
phone
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 or
tablet
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help
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helps
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 to watch
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movie
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a movie
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 during covid 19.
Thus
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, watching
movies
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 in
phones
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 or
tablet
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 is good.
On the other hand
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, there
are
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is
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 full enjoyment in watching
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movie
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a movie
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 in
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cinema
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a cinema
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 rather than
phones
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 or
tablets
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. Individual's pocket doesn't allow to buy a mobile
phone
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 for watching
movies
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 so they go to
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cinema
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the cinema
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 for watching
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movie
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a movie
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.
In addition
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 to
this
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 In mobile
phone
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 or
tablet
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yongester
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youngster
 cant watch
movie
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 with family cos they are not comfortable so they go to
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cinema
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the cinema
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 to watch
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movie
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a movie
the movie
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.
For
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example
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 individual
dont
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don't
 watch adult
movies
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in
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at
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home
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the home
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 so they go to
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cinema
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the cinema
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 to watch adult
movies
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.
Hence
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,
cinema
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 is good for full enjoyment. In
conclusion
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 considering all the point mentioned
above watching
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above-watching
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movie
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a movie
the movie
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 in free
time
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phone
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 or
tablet
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 is good but
also
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cinema
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 is good for full enjoyment with family and friends.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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