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Some people believe schoolchildren should help to create rules in their schools. Others say teachers alone should decide what the rules are. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nobody would dispute the fact that everyone should obey
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 in society. While some people believe that only educators are allowed to participate in making
rules
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 in school, I hold the view that young
students
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 should be involved in as well. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides and give reasons for my opinion. The reasons why young
students
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 should be involved in making
rules
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 are manifold.
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, it is true that
children
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 can learn from the decision-making process, and they can understand more about why
rules
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 are tremendously important.
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,
children
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 are more likely to follow the
rules
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 if their opinions are considered. Another key benefit is that these young
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 can learn how to make decisions, and
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 will help form their decision-making mind.
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, it is obvious that
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 are in general more creative than adults,
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 they can make the
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 more interesting
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 as they can add more visuals.
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, there are benefits when solely teachers are allowed to make
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. Adults are more mature than
children
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 because they have more life experience and more knowledge. If only educators were making
rules
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, the process would be more efficient.
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, adults know what is
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best for their
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, so multiple perspectives will still be considered.
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 teachers are less creative than kids,
rules
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 are not supposed to be like arts, and they are supposed to be strict and clear. In conclusion,
although
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 some people would argue that only educators should make
rules
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, I believe that there are more benefits when young
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also
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 involve in the process,
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 as their creativity can make the
rules
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 more interesting, they can learn from making decisions, and they will be more likely to follow the
rules
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • schoolchildren
  • help to create rules
  • teachers decide
  • sense of responsibility
  • ownership over education
  • adhering to rules
  • realistic rules
  • students' needs and perspectives
  • standardized approach
  • professional approach
  • maintaining discipline
  • conducive learning environment
  • consistency and fairness
  • authoritative structure
  • order and discipline
  • students' foresight
  • immediate desires
  • long-term benefits
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