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Is it a fact that people nowadays are under a lot of pressure and their life are becoming increasingly stressful. What could be possible reasons for this? What are some solutions to address this issue?

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These days human beings stressing over a lot, so their lives becoming pressurize too.
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serious trouble
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 because it effects
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their mental health and moods.
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 two causes of why
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 get stressed all the time and two
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 solutions. The
first
 reason may be
fear
 of the future.
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 is
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 reaction over something
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important
,
may be
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fear
 of the future.
This
 is a natural reaction over something important, maybe exams or project protection.
As a result
, all
people
 experience great stress and self-doubt.
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 key factor is keeping all the problems to yourself. The majority of
people
 prefer to deal with
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 problems by yourself, but all
people
 need support. For sure, there are two functioning solutions to
this
 issue.
First
 of all, of
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this
 would be obvious, but
this
 sort of
people
 need to work on yourself. They should overcome their
fear
,
for example
, if they work
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harder and productive, they will be pleased with themselves and will believe in the best in the future.
Secondly
, in my country stressed
people
 can take
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 support from online psychologists, if they can't share their experiences with close
people
, they can appeal anonymously. In
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conclusion
, stressing over is an important problem which is primarily caused by
worry
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 of
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feature
future
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carrying
caring
 the whole load of problems on yourself. I recommend them to overcome their
fear
 and to share their worries.
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