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Media surrounds us, from the shows we watch on television to the music we listen to on the radio. How does media affect the society? Do you agree that the impact of media has more disadvantages than benefits?

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Educational institutions are the place where children learn more skills and abilities to get
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success in their life while some
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 they do not need any academic curriculum to get abilities and skills, But I disagree with
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why
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 is must for
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, everyone has a different ability in their personalities, even some of them have a God gifted,
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 of these qualities, they still need a proper
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, students
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need
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 for guidance.
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, they will go out of track and might be they will use it
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 a wrong
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 without tutoring.
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,
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 gives a persona to
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. Even if we look around us. It is easy to judge a person who is well educated by his personality and
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 of talking.
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, in these days completions is increasing day by day and individuals try to do their best as much as possible even some of them they still continue their
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 within their job because they want more uniqueness and bright from others, and it is only possible with higher
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 of the
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 always gives a wide platform to them which make them able to tackle all the situations and make the
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 easy to get success in their life. To conclude,
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 is the major goal of everyone,
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 it is only possible with good
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 because it creates a straight path of success and gives a variety to tackle different situations
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