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in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

#spite #advances #agriculture #people #world #case
In the past few years, agriculture
have
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 got new technologies to enhance
the
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production,but
still
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people
 are struggling to get
food
 around the world. Poverty and distribution are the main reason behind
problem
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the problem
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.
However
, governments can give subsidies on
food
 or provide
finacial
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financial
 aid
tothe
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to the
 needy
people
.
Firstly
, if we look
on
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 the reason
of
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people
 are still not getting bread and butter on their
dinning
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dining
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 table. Poverty and distribution of
food
products
 are the main causes
for
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this
problem
.
For instance
, big corporations and rich
people
 buy all the raw
food
products
 and store them into the big warehouses. So for their business to make more profit, they are only sending
little
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the little
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 amount of
products
 out in the market. when the demand increase and price of their
food
 item go up. In
this
 case, middlemen's make more money while
,
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 common
people
 are suffering without proper feed. Because, when the price
rise
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, it is hard to afford
food
 for common men or women.
On the other hand
, governments can play a vital role to overcome
this
problem
,they can give subsidies
on
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food
products
also
 can make a strict
low
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law
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 on the storage of
food
products
.
For example
,
government
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the government
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 of India buy crops from farmers and distribute to the poor
people
 citizens every month.
Moreover
, there are strict laws about the storage of crops, no one can do storage more
then
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 certain limit or guidelines. To the sum up, after all the
advancment
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advancement
 into the agriculture sector and the rise into the production. There are some hungry
people
 everywhere around the world.
Only
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 way to
slove
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solve
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this
problem
 is
government
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the government
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 can help
people
 to get
food
 by giving
finacial
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financial
 aid
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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