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It is a fact that people are under a lot of pressure and their lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What could be the possible reasons for this? What are some solutions to address this issue?

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Sometimes we have a strange feeling as we have a see very dramatic film. We want to cry or feel empty. The name of these emotions is
stress
.
Stress
 is our body's natural response to external stimuli. It can be: noise, pressure to meet rising expectations, being overworked and unable to meet deadlines. They can be caused by anxiety about providing themselves and loved ones with the necessary, problems of public life. 
Stress
 is not WHAT happened to you, but HOW you perceive it.  After all, even one word can be stressful. At the same time, each of us reacts differently to stressful situations. How does person feel? He becomes aggressive, does not cope well with his emotions. More often than not,
stress
 caused by a lack of control and despair. These can be exams, public speaking, working overtime, urgent deadline, be criticized by the boss or low salary. Many psychologists recommend that the best way to relieve
stress
 is doing nothing during the day. I think it can help, of course, but sometimes it may be not so effective.
For example
, my acquaintance once read
this
 on the internet when she was just starting her exams. She decided to lie down all day and get some rest. Fortunately, she had a weekend
then
, because the
next
 day she had a fever from excitement. In fact, we possess many ways to relieve
stress
 and it is various for each person. Doing nothing can help me, and doing what she loves can help my friend. .
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