Some people think certain prisoners should be made to set up unpaid community work, instead of just being put behid the bars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, it is believed by some part of the population that prisoners should devote their time to unpaid community work rather than sitting behind the bars. I agree with
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, it could re-educate some people.
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with, on the one hand, by giving criminals an opportunity to work they are likely to benefit the local community by providing free workers and somehow balanced costs of keeping them in the prison.
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is because of the fact that not only do those who were imprisoned can be seen as a free workforce but
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their contribution can be considered as
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for feeding them in prisons which
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invested by the government.
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, the government expenditures could be paid off and
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approach is likely to bring benefits to
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, recent research has shown that more than 20% of prisoners in the UK devote their time to building and construction that, in turn, have a great influence on
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, it can be clearly observed that people can re-educate by doing some other additional activities and when feeling valuable for
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world.
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is due to the fact that not only do they have a chance to try some themselves in other spheres and develop various skills but
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since they might feel that there are other choices
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,
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perception of life that, in turn, might give them a chance to receive exempt. Eventually, to conclude, I completely agree with the fact that prisoners should be involved in different
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of work since,
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of all, it is likely to have advantages for the local area and,
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, it might function as a re-education for people.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rehabilitation
  • reintegration
  • reoffending
  • cost-effectiveness
  • deterrence
  • incarceration
  • restorative justice
  • public safety
  • community service
  • unpaid work
  • offenders
  • prison maintenance
  • structured punishment
  • meaningful work
  • reintegration into society
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