students leave high school without learning the way how to manage their money. what are the reasons and solutions for this issue?

Many young
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are leaving school without a basic and vital understanding of how personal finances ought to be managed in the adult world.
This
lack of knowledge is
due to
a lack of
life
experience and limited education which can be solved in several ways. One main reason why so many young people are unable to manage their own finances upon finishing high school is that they have been living with their
parents
for free.
As a result
, they have never needed to earn a salary or save their
money
in order to pay bills
such
as phone bills or mortgage. Another cause is that
schools
do not have any
course
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courses
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for personal financial management in their outline.
Schools
focus
instead
on classic subjects,
such
as mathematics, geography, history and languages, which means important
life
skills
are not being taught. Both teachers and
parents
are failing to prepare young people for the real world.
However
, there are several methods for solving young students’ inability to manage their
money
.
Firstly
,
parents
should spend time with their children teaching them how
money
is earned and used for either savings or expenses. One simple step could be for
parents
to start by teaching
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young
younger
children how to manage their pocket
money
and, as their child grows up, expand into more serious household costs.
Secondly
,
schools
should add
life
skills
into their curriculum for students
especially
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final year
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students. In
this
way, children will be able to learn in a supportive environment how their finances need to be budgeted and managed to avoid debt problems later in
life
. In conclusion, young people lack financial management
skills
due to
the ignorance of
parents
and
schools
, which can only be tackled if both take more responsibility for teaching school leavers
with
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the right
skills
.
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