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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, many small
shops
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 are no more in existence due to people's preference for large stores and malls. I believe
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 is a positive development because malls usually have varieties of
items
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 and
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 only registered products. Purchasing of
items
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 at malls is easier as it reduces the stress of patronising many
shops
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 on different streets for varieties of
items
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.
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 is because large
shops
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 are a
one-stop shop
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 for
consumption
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the consumption
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 of all
items
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 desired.
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, more than 80% of small
shops
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 in my community were selling the same brand of baby diapers as their neighbours, which makes life
difficulty
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nursing mothers' in that locality. But since Shoprite supermarket was opened very close to our locality 4years ago, many of them were closed down because they could not satisfy the needs of we consumers.
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, aside the varieties of
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 possess by large stores, all goods sold there are registered by appropriate government agencies.
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 major reason gives consumers the confidence of being able to trace the source of
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product
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a product
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 if there is any challenge. A good example was
a local rice
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local rice
a bowl of local rice
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 made by Festus Group of Company, that was discovered to have been expired. The company was traced through the label on the pack, it was sanctioned and the circulation of the rice was stopped. In conclusion,
increase
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 in the closure of small
shops
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 is a very welcome development as their services are not satisfying and safe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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