Excessive computer gaming is one of the biggest threats to children's physical and mental health in the 21st century. Discuss the problems and associated solutions for this issue.

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computer
gaming is one of the biggest threats to
children
's physical and mental health.
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essay will consider the problems and solutions
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this
problem.
Firstly
computer
gaming usually causes an
addiction
.
Addiction
-problem that all people have. It doesn't matter adult or kid. But
espessially
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especially
for
kids
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it has more influence, that
children
can't live without
comuter
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computer
.
Therfore
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Therefore
computer
takes all the person's
time
that they couldn't even eat or sleep.
Secondly
, due to
addiction
,
computer
games are usually lead to health issues.
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, overweight and nervousness. In
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cases
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it
also
causes stress,
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depression, anxiety, exhaustion and overwhelming feeling. As a solution,
first
of all, parents could control the process of gaming exactly
time
. Putting limits on gaming could decrease
addiction
and help
children
.
Also
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inventors of
computer
games
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would adjust options of
game
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the game
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,
such
as
limited
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time
it will
also
help to stop
addiction
.
Secondly
,
children
should do some sport to restore
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. As a conclusion, nowadays
computer
gaming leads to physical and mental problems that could be solved by limiting
time
doing some sport.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive
  • threats
  • physical health
  • mental health
  • associated
  • problems
  • solutions
  • address
  • issue
  • computer gaming
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