Many people nowadays spend a large part of their free time using a smart phone. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It will not astonish me if someone compares a smartphone to an organ of our body. When was the
last
time
you
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a day without a phone? I am sure one will have to rattle their brains to answer
this
question. There are various research reports that suggest in recent times humans spend a significant portion of their leisure
time
with
this
device. But the real question to answer is whether the same is proving
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to be beneficial for their development
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Let me enlist the key positives first. The utmost important change
which
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it has
bought
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in our
life
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is
easy
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of connectivity. It not only allows us to be updated with the latest news across the world
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but
also
enables us to be in touch with our loved ones.
Further
, it has
also
helped in reducing workload and unnecessary travel
time
. One can now complete all their banking and portfolio
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activities right from the comfort of their
homes
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with the mere use of their
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.
However
, every coin has two sides. Many of us have become lethargic and prefer to spend more
time
at home than travel or move out. Relatives tend to lose personal touch since they rely on messages rather than meeting in person.
In addition
, people are exposed to harmful rays from batteries and display screens which may damage the eye permanently. Recent studies suggest that children spend a critical amount of their
time
playing games on their parent's smartphones rather than outdoor sports.
For example
, my nephew plays more football on a
smarthphone
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smartphone
than on the playground. In my opinion, the benefits of using a smartphone far exceed the negatives. It is a personal choice for people of how effectively they utilize
this
device which could very well be called the smartest machine invented by humans.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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