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A person's worth nowadays, seems to be judged according to social statues and material possession. Old- fashion values such as honor, kidness and trust no longer seem important. Do what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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In today's world, due to social status and material possessions, a person's worth could be judged, while traditional
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, being kind, being honourable, or being reliable is not significant anymore. In my opinion, I do not agree that the education levels, career position, and owning property have a more impressive effect than personal behaviour at
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's worth.
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, I will explain why often successful and wealthy
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 have a negative impression, and
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 I will outline, the positive aspects of traditional
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. As
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's misbehaviours and detrimental habits, social status or material possession are not taken into account. For
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 reason, multiple wealthy businesspeople and successful celebrities suffer from broken marriages or unreliable relationships, and these problematic conditions cause to trigger their anxiety and depression.
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, they do not set a moral example, and being criticized for the absence of old-fashioned
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. The prime example of
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, a great number of celebrities, who are extremely rich, are criticized for their drug addiction and rough attitudes.
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, traditional value is tightly engaged with having a mature personality that makes
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 admirable.
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, they have never been judged for their positive attitude and wise character.
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, a manager might gain employees respect and love through their behaviour, regardless of their high-income and position.
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, children are encouraged to promote personal skills and reflect on their traditions. In conclusion, money, accommodation, or a degree is just a tool in
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's lives.
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 as honour, trust, or kindness are detrimental skills for judging
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's worth.
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