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Many countries are currently expanding their tourist industries. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, the
hospitality
 industry noticeably increasingly stronger before
this
 pandemic. In each country has the different attractions knows how to grab
people
's attention, especially famous places around the world
such
 as France, New York, Vietnam and so much more, where tourist used to choose for their vacation
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 and made the tourist industries developed. Everything has been improved since 2000, transports development, education, life and even leisure time. In
this
 modern life,
people
 choose to have a vacation after months of working and study hard by travelling around the world for enjoy the services and explore a new
culture
 which is a great thing to develop and grow the
business
. Those
people
 who travelled has contributed for the
hospitality
 industry, and the " multinational corporations" is a good impact to the tourism services by bringing different style architectures created in our country, and
this
 particular reason for the circumstances, more jobs have been created and the salary is increasing. The more
people
 going to travel, the more foreign agencies were opened officially, and it leads to more restaurant, hotel and resorts sharply increased with middle-class and high-end class services. The
hospitality
business
 can make a great extend money by attractive visitors with a stunning view and high-end places, it can help their
business
 expand.
Culture
 food is a part of tourist too, the cuisine and consumer famous everywhere for everyone want to experience and enjoy the premium products. In conclusion, I do not see any positive about
hospitality
 nowadays due to everyone enjoy and curious wanted to explore the world,
therefore
 it helps the
business
 going up. Especially, the country has a diverse
culture
 can attractive different nationalities want to know your
culture
 and cuisine.
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