A new generation of entrepreneurs believe that privately funded space tourism will be the next exciting development in space exploration. How true do you think this is? How would space tourism affect space exploration as we know it today?

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sector for

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are able to be

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way to explore

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. I believe that

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would be an immersive

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for many

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reason, it can be supplied more money to spend on

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area and its expensive equipment

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telescopes, rockets and human resources.

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, political support might be increased with huge public attention

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with, there is a broad consensus amongst experts that the problematic issue for

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research is lack of investment and funding. In general,

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exploration owing to many fruitless attempts that are made before.

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activity

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can be attractive

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of society. With

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attraction

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drawbacks can be solved. Research can

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independently regardless of

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budget.

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,

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has a behemoth potential to supply adequate money for

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searches and

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companies. It is important to bear in mind that plenty of

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researches have been suffering from

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of financial and political support. With developing

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, investors are able to be more generous when

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compare

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the past. Because of

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they would see income which might come from

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.

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, many

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have seen

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researches as a retrenchment for budget and it should be cut as possible. When

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started to rise up,

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can change their decision with regards to revenue from the

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.

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, more funding

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able to be supplied by governments and investors with

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to

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potential of

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unique experience. To conclude, touristic

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to

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has been seen as a spark to start a new era in

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exploration by many young

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entrepreneurs

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essay is to agree

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that

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are able to be a viable alternative for both financially and

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politically.