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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phones (cellphones) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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. in other
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 hole globe
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using
phone
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 kind of application.
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 will evaluate both frons and cons side in
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 glance of advantages, in which we can see
application
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the application
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 is connected with
people
 as a helper each and every place we can use without any
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for example
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 , in
this
app
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update with all over the family tree . on the other hands ,
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 and they do not know how much time gone in their hands
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for instance
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to
 video ,
people
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 think
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 is waste of time.
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 put down my pen ,
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 firmly
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 that
people
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app
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