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Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution, and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations. Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

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Airlines
connects
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 one country to another and
makes
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 the journeys quicker as compared to any other mode of transport. Nowadays, every state and territory have their own airports. Aeroplanes are becoming popular for travelling due to economic costs and more flexibility. Numerous people
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 that
administration
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 should put heavy levy to slow-down the air traffic. I
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 with the statement because of the following reasons.
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aviation
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the aviation
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 industry creates thousands of jobs from domestic and international markets. Many tourists prefer to travel
in
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 different countries because of cheap flights and easy visa processing.
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, the incoming
passengers
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 books hotels, rent-cars, buy clothes that
boosts
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 the economy of the country.
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, some tourists
comes
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 with working visa that fulfils the demand of labour in areas
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 as hospitality and farming.
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, countries
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 as Australia, Dubai, USA,
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billion
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 of dollars every year through tourism and even many cities depends on tourism for their economic funding. On another side, building more airports and running cheap fares on flights causing more contamination in the environment and officials should increase the toll on air-transport. The gases released from aeroplanes increase carbon levels in the ecosystem that leads to climate change.
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 more people visiting a country puts
burden
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the burden
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 on local transport that leads to congestion.
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, there should be
cap
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 number of passengers coming every year as it will
creates
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 a balance in the environment. To sum up,
government
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the government
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 should
supports
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 the tourism industry but they should focus on problems that are arising with
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 in air-travel.
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