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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Other believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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 it is sometimes thought that abundance of
information
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 ought to be shared with scientific
research
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, business and education world, other
people
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 believe that
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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knowledges
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 highly essential to be shared without any benefits.
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, a number of
people
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 believe that
information
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 sharing with several parties allow knowledge to be extended and I agree.
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,
information
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 sharing to wider society increase the visibility of a writer and as the result allows societies which have the same interest to contact the writer to conduct a
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 project.
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, cooperation between academic researchers with industry to address air pollution issues.
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, providing free
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 without imposing any charges lead to the cooperation of several parties in delivering a solution for the nation.
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,
information
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 sharing allows a new idea to be created and enhance, which directly provide benefits to many
people
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. Aside from that, some
people
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 trusted that
information
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 cannot be shared freely as it is too valuable.
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 to assure to protect the idea of the writer which probably work hard in producing the
information
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.
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, a novel outcome from
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 managed by a university may not be shared publicly. By doing
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 approach, the result of the
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 is protected and prevent an irresponsible society to misuse the
information
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. Another reason is that, to appreciate a group of
people
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 work which have been work hard in producing knowledge. In conclusion, while numerous
people
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 may vary in their opinion, I think is better to share
information
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 to substantial societies as the benefit will be wider and allow new idea and improvement of the knowledge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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