Some group of people have benefited from modern communications technology but some people do not have benefit at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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something from the new platform which social media but others argued says they did not get anything from it. I disagree
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person gets benefits in technologies rising in
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group in the society.
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all of us. Though
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company makes a lot of profits of every application invented but as
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it helps us to makes our job easy and communicate our loved one even in
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land.
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, those who work abroad can easily talk to their family because of the new technology. They just need to have cellular phones or computer and
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internet to be able to
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communicate
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of
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who get benefits but
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think they did not have benefited
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the new tech in
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they are just unaware of it. Television, radio and
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that
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sees and hear are the means of communicating to the communities.
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must vote and for them to know whom they will choose they need to know the politician by looking
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campaign through the Television or listening to the radio. It means, unintentionally
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world benefited
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modern communication. In conclusion,
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despute
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party who get benefits in
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modern technologies,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern communications technology
  • global connectivity
  • remote work
  • digital divide
  • e-commerce
  • socioeconomic status
  • geography
  • impersonal
  • face-to-face communication
  • over-reliance
  • cyberbullying
  • misinformation
  • privacy concerns
  • tech-savvy
  • health implications
  • eye strain
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