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In many countries, truancy * is a worrying problem for both parents and educators. What are the causes of truancy, and what may be the effects on the child and the wider community? (* truancy = the situation when a child pretends to go to school but in fact goes somewhere else, for example to play unsupervised. The verb is ‘to play truant from school.’)

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Truancy
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 is considered a major concernment not only for
parents
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 but
also
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 for educators.
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this
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 is a delicate matter that might require a profound analysis,
this
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 essay will discuss some of the possible causes of
truancy
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 and how it can affect the community as a whole.
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 with,
children
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, nowadays, have almost
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 unsupervised access to the internet;
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 they are exposed to youngsters and other groups of people who might influence them to break the rules and develop a bad behaviour at home and in school.
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, the necessity of working long hours to afford the cost of living in urban centres is making
parents
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 less available to educate and discipline their offsprings properly. To illustrate
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, a study published in the United States showed that sixty-five per cent of
parents
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 cannot educate their
children
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 during the week due to their working routine.
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,
truancy
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 represents the surface of a problem that might inflict severe damages not only to individuals but
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for
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 society.
Children
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 who behave unproperly
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at in
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in
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 early ages might develop serious behavioural problems in the future, including the possibility of start using drugs and
practicing
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 criminal activities.
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, Colombia has one of the most unsupervised
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 of
children
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 due to their culture,
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 they have to face youngsters who are enrolled in criminal activities and drugs traffic. To conclude, unsupervised access to the internet and the
abscence
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absence
 of
parents
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 regarding their educational responsibilities with their offsprings might be the causes of
truancy
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 nowadays.
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, individuals and society might be negatively affected
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this
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 phenomenon, once personal disorders might lead a child to commit crimes in the future.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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