some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. discuss both view and give your opinion.

Nowadays we have a lot of communication
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thanks to
technology
. Some
people
think these
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are
usefull
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for making
people
more sociable but some
people
don't disagree
this
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opinion. On the one
hand
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some
people
's opinion is
technology
is making them less sociable. They think getting together with friends less often because of
technology
.
People
can't share their emotions. On the other
hands
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some
people
think
technology
is making
people
more sociable.
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