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It is more important for governments to spend public funds on promoting a healthy lifestyle than treatment Do you agree or disagree?

#governments #funds #lifestyle #treatment
We live in a
fast paced
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environements
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environments
environment
, where the critical role of the
government
 is to take
care
 of their citizens, by
utlizing
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utilizing
 the public funds for healthy
lifestyle
 and
tretament
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treatment
.
Although
, I think
governement
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government
 should give equal importance
of
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 their expenditure
to
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on
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 both healthy
lifestyle
, and
treatment
 of their
people
. On one hand, it is important for the
government
 to
utlize
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utilize
 these funds building parks around the residential communities, adding sports facilities, and installing bins are few of the efforts
government
 can take for promoting a good
lifestyle
. Not only
this
,
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but,
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government
 regulators managing the
labor
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labour
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 laws
also
 plays a critical role in promoting healthy work culture and
restrictling
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restricting
 companies to push any employees working above the threshold.
Such
 policies
makes
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 sure that employees have good
work life
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work-life
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 balance and
also
governement
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government
 supporting them with various
recretional
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recreational
 activities.
On the contrary
, taking
care
 of the health of the citizens is equally important and every
efforts
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 should be put
to
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in to
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 make
treatment
 possible for everyone whether a rich or the poor. Medical facilities and
treatment
 should be equal for everyone in
the
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society.
However
,
this
 is not only critical just for the citizens but for the growth of the economy as well.
For instance
, in the situation of
pandemic
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a pandemic
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 like COVID-19, the
government
 should make sure that the
vacciness
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vaccines
vaccine
 are available for everyone in the country. Taking
care
 of
people
 by the
governemnt
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government
 in
such
diffcult
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difficult
 times helps in progressing the economy in a positive direction. To conclude, governments should make sure that the public funds are utilized not just for promoting
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
,
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 but taking
care
 and
treatment
 of all their
people
 within the country. Maintaining
this
 balance
also
 reflects the
government
 concerns for their
people
 which put them with
the
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 positive outlook across the globe. Being someone from sports fraternity, I am very thankful to
Canadian
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the Canadian
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government
 for taking
care
 of both of these issues positively.
Submitted by Shubham Trivedi on

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