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Some people think that international news is more important than local news. Others argue that local news is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In recent decades, the globalization causes
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someone believes that international
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 is more significant than the domestic one.
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, others hold the
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 on the opposite
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. In
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 essay, I will elaborate on both sides and give my own
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 on
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 issue. On the one hand,
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 arguing in the favour of international
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, generally, claim that in today’s developing generation more and more
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 prefer to choose to study abroad. In order to get more information about the policies in the target country for international students, those group of
people
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 believe that international
news
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 is more valuable than the local one for them. Meanwhile, due to the pandemic which our world face right now, these
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 pay more attention to the international
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 because they care for the serious level of their destination of studying.
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, other groups of
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 hold the opposite
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 because through the local
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 can get some practical information about the local development, it may benefit for our daily life. For instances, the subway has been constructed, the price of meat increase, the new shopping mall has opened and so on.
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, prior information can help them to know the latest change in the city and get convenience from
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 development. In conclusion, both international and national
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 is significant, as these both control our lives differently.
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, for me, I believe that the international
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 in much important because I applied to a university abroad. The policies and pandemic conditional in foreign will give more effect on me than the local
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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