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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Reading the
news
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 is a very critical part of our daily lives. It not only informs us about the latest events taking place in our city and across the world
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 but
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 increases our vocabulary and improves our knowledge. Nowadays, there are multiple ways present to keep ourself updated, either traditional way of newspapers or technological driven method of smart devices.
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 some
people
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 argue that after
few
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 years,
people
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 will read the
news
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 for free via the web and stop purchasing newspapers. I disagree with the statement, and I believe my ideas will be discussed in
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 essay along with instances from my knowledge. On one hand, reading with the help of our smart-phones or tablets could have a huge
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 on saving trees which are cut to produce paper. A research report suggested that more than 30% of the trees cut are linked to
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 production.
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, it is very convenient to read using
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 small machines
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 when you are
traveling
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.
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, I read the
news
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 on my phone while commuting to work as it is difficult to hold the newspaper during peak hours.
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, messages could be communicated in a more impactful way using
variety
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 of pictures and colours online.
On the other hand
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,
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is a very large industry and
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 changes could have an adverse
impact
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 on jobs for several
people
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.
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,
paper
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 is currently recycled to save the
enviornment
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environment
.
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, the harmful
impact
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 on nature is reduced.
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, they do not cause any harmful
impact
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to
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 our eyes unlike other
prodcuts
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products
 mentioned earlier.
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, we do not
requrie
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require
 to charge batteries to read the everyday
news
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.
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, it enables us to save electricity. In conclusion, it is critical to
maintain
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 a balance between the two forms of
news
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. It is a matter of choice for
people
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 as to what they prefer.
Younger
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The younger
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 generation may move to
online
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the online
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 medium,
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, there is a sizeable older generation which will stick to the age-old and reliable newspaper.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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