many students take partime jobs while studying in university , you think it’s a good idea or bad idea.

Nowadays, there has commonly been a

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amount of

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with regards to the pupil work while they are studying. In general in developed countries and

also

in the developing one,

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matter has a contradictory opinion from

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public

and governments. The main purpose of

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essay is to present the negative affect of students

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job

. From my

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, I believe it is

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for students health

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mentally

and

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physically

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. It is evident that if children

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are working, it would prevent them to have a good education. To explain that more, students who work as a

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they would not be able to concentrate on their schools.

Moreover

, they would have a massive

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to do

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, so they will not have the time to express their selves and build their own

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identity

.

For example

, they could not

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handle

daily homework and their job role.

Thus

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it is crucial to protect children rights as what United Nation did. As a

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we need to support

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legislation

. The

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governments should ensure that the coming generation is ready educational and emotional to carry out to build the society.

In other words

, if

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students

have their own time in the university, they will be capable when they are

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graduated

to work with full energy to change the country in the best way. To illustrate that, pupil

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usually

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for their

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interest

and hobby in college period, so if they became busy with heavy

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duty

,

this

will prevent their growth

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emotionally

and

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physically

physical

.

Finally

,

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is the vital point that

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the student from working as partime. In conclusion, when it comes to

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theme, different individuals would suggest a wide range of proposals discuss what needs to be done. Overall, it is the responsibility of the governments and civilians alike to help improve the matters at hand. As well as I

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before,

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think there is a harsh impact on the student.