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Some people think that international news is more important than local news. Others argue that local news is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

People
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 hold different views when it comes to the significance of international
news
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 and local
news
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. As a part of society holds the opinion that global
news
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 has an upper hand as compared to the domestic, whereas, the other group,
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, believes that the local happenings have more significance. I personally believe that
one
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 needs to aware of
both
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 national and international headlines in
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 competitive world, so
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 the perspectives will be discussed.
People
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 arguing in the favour of international
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, generally, claim that in today’s developing generation more and more
people
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 are investing in the international business and trade,
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one
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 needs to be aware of all the happenings around the world. Because a major happening in
one
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 country can significantly affect the business across the globe positively or negatively, so
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 situations need to be monitored closely, which could be done easily through the international
news
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. In the recent
situation
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 of COVID19,
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, all the cross country trades were put to the stop and the situations, and the latest announcements from the different nations could be tracked easily from the new updates, which
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 helped the businessmen in investing carefully. While,
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, many still believe that the local updates are much more significant because many days to day activities depend on them
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 because through the
news
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one
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 can get alert, and prepare beforehand for any current or upcoming
situation
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 that might affect them. It is a clear fact that a local
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,
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 a riot; hunger strike; traffic diversion due to a construction worker, can have a great impact on an individual’s daily routine.
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, prior information can help in prevention and preparing the community
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, which has been proved right in the
situation
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 due to the Coronavirus. The local
news
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 about the spreading of disease made
people
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 much more aware and alert, which
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, to some extent, helped in slowing down its spread. In conclusion,
both
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 international and national
news
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 is significant, as these
both
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 control our lives differently, but significantly. For the ones who have invested in the business or have relatives in other countries, the global
news
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 is more significant, whereas, the others with more local connections consider domestic
news
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 to be more important.

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