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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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In some countries, Taking a
gap
year
 is becoming more and more popular among young
people
. Some
people
 think there are many advantages
of
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to
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 travelling or working before entering university.
In contrast
, others have the opposite opinion. I will discuss both of these opinions below. Some
people
 think having a
gap
year
 can benefit youngs in many ways.
First
, spending a
year
 for work before going to university can improve their social skills,
such
 as communication skills and teamwork with others. Both of these can benefit their future careers. Other than work, travel can open young
people
’s minds. Experience in different cultures can make them know our world better, which is especially important for students who may study social science in future.
Thus
, there are many ways to learn from the experience of the
gap
year
.
However
, some
people
 may think there are disadvantages of not going to university directly. One reason is that the
gap
year
 increases the economic pressure of the family. Travelling costs may need to be covered by our parents. Though some
people
 choose to work, it is more likely that you can not find a high salary job.
Furthermore
,
gap
year
 means you will graduate later for one or more years. Which means you need more years to give back to your family. As demonstrate above, there are pros and cons for a
gap
year
.
Thus
, in my opinion, whether we do a
gap
year
 or not depends on person to person. We can not generally say a
gap
year
 is good or bad.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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